Peer Feedback

Feedback provided to Stacey Edmonds on Blog Stage 1

Annotated Bibliography

http://staceyedmondsblog.wordpress.com/reference-list/

Stacey, This is great. I particularly like the way you give the reader background information at the beginning as it puts the bibliography into context. What a great list of “scholarly, theoretical and professional” sources and this quote is well worded.

I had been putting why I chose the article into the information analysis and can also see how succinct your sentences are keeping it to 2-4 sentences is hard when there is so much information to convey. Reading through your has helped me see that it is important to add the “why you chose it” to this section.

In reference1 your sentence “This article has provided me with …” is exactly what the marking rubric is asking. Thanks for demonstrating this so well. In this paragraph you might like to add s to “answer” or it might just be the way I read it.

In the second reference you write “after reading this article” and again in the third reference the phrase “This article has empowered me…” puts the right reflection onto the reasoning behind your choices. In reference four you might want to rephrase sentence 1 by putting a full stop in at “intriguing” or enhance “as” to “because”.

I am impressed with the articles you found and have a few similar in my annotated bibliography. Have fun! And again, congratulations on doing this so well!

Searching searching searching

http://staceyedmondsblog.wordpress.com/2013/08/18/let-the-expert-searching-begin/comment-page-1/#comment-227

Stacey, This is great. I particularly like the way you give the reader background information at the beginning as it puts the bibliography into context. What a great list of “scholarly, theoretical and professional” sources and this quote is well worded.

I had been putting why I chose the article into the information analysis and can also see how succinct your sentences are keeping it to 2-4 sentences is hard when there is so much information to convey. Reading through your has helped me see that it is important to add the “why you chose it” to this section.

In reference1 your sentence “This article has provided me with …” is exactly what the marking rubric is asking. Thanks for demonstrating this so well. In this paragraph you might like to add s to “answer” or it might just be the way I read it.

In the second reference you write “after reading this article” and again in the third reference the phrase “This article has empowered me…” puts the right reflection onto the reasoning behind your choices. In reference four you might want to rephrase sentence 1 by putting a full stop in at “intriguing” or enhance “as” to “because”.

I am impressed with the articles you found and have a few similar in my annotated bibliography. Have fun! And again, congratulations on doing this so well!

Feedback provided to Sue Jostsons on Blog Stage 1

Using Expert Search Strategies

http://mrsj2013.wordpress.com/2013/08/24/expertsearch/comment-page-1/#comment-6

Dear Sue,
This certainly has an X Factor with a fishing theme. As a fisherman’s widow (he fishes each weekend so I can study!) the quote links nicely with the image and text. The fishing language used such as embark, expedition, charter, traverse and discover all give the reader a sense of adventure which is exactly what fishing is. Some other words could include; lures, rigs and rods!

Your images are well designed, clear and colourful and always correctly labelled. The tables are also clear and I am wondering how you made them fully aligned with the blog as this is one of my challenges.

Mandy asked what the relevance was with putting the number of hits into the tables but I can see that your table with the added columns of relevancy and satisfaction give a clear indication of results under each search string. You have included tables and critically analyse  your expert searches succinctly and with clarity. You have included all requirements found in the requirements except for the video which I am sure will be amazing. I look forward to seeing this soon.

Thanks for your thoughts on this as I have learned about your clear reasons for excluding some search terms and am impressed with the use of the subject fields used as they have enabled you to gain a better and richer amount of sources.
Kind regards,
Michelle

Feedback provided to Sue Jostsons on Blog Stage 2

Analysis

http://mrsj2013.wordpress.com/2013/10/26/analysis/comment-page-1/#comment-42

Well done – you now have something to reflect upon in the future. Just check the spelling of Kuhlthau halfway down paragraph 5. Kuhlthau, Maniotes & Caspari refer to the five kinds of learning in the inquiry process (2007, p. 9). There was some learning happening as curriculum content and information literacy was occurring. Meta-cognition will always be the deeper and higher order thinking that is difficult to do. The literacy competence and social skills will always be there – but we are in the information age – I want to be a part of the pedagogical change and shift the learning paradigm to new heights! Check out page 10 and 11 too!

Kuhlthau, C. C.,  Maniotes, L. K. & Caspari, A. K. (2007). Guided inquiry : learning in the 21st century. Westport, Conn: Libraries Unlimited

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